The chart below show changes in student enrollment by degree at a university in Canada in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show changes in student enrollment by degree at a university in Canada in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart contains data concerning the number of students who enrolled in
degree
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a degree
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at a university in Canada in 1980 and 2000.
It is clear that
there are significant changes in the
percentage
of student
enrollment
from sector to sector in the given period. Looking at the pie chart more closely, one can see that the dominant sector in enrolling was the
degree
for Bachelor in 1980 and 2000.
However
, the figures for
enrollment
in
Bachelor
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Bachelors
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declined considerably by 34%p from 76
percentage
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in 1980 to 42
percentage
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in 2000. That was a decrease of almost half.
On the other hand
, student
enrollment
in Master's degrees almost quadrupled, increasing by about 26
percentage
points. Even though there was a significant
growing
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over the 20-year period. It was smaller than
enrollment
in
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Bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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,
also
in 2000.
In addition
, the figures
of
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associate
degree
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degrees
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also
went up by 5
percentage
points. The figures
of
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doctoral
degree
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degrees
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showed an increase
by
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3% points.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, percentage, enrollment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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