Young people are often the first to suffer when job opportunities are scarce. In which ways does age affect employment opportunities ? how might employers deal with the issue fairly ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience .

Presently, majority of the young
people
work
the jobs they want in order to earn.
Thus
some of them can have
lack
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a lack
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of
work
experience
.
This
situation impacts employees' opportunities so as to
be
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apply
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lack
of
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experience
and
knowledge
. Employers and well -
experience
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experienced
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people
should instruct them how to deal with these problems. In
this
essay, I will discuss why young employees frequently find it difficult when
job
opportunities are scarce and provide relevant examples from my own
knowledge
and
experience
. Nowadays numerous
youngs
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young
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have
their
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apply
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jobs over the world
due to
making
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make
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some
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apply
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money. After they graduate
universities
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from universities
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they get
bachelor
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bachelor's
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or magisterial degrees. After
then
they try to find the
job
that they want so as to earn. Most of them desire
well-paid
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a well-paid
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and
good condition
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good-condition
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work place
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workplace
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,
although
they
have
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apply
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lack
of
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apply
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experience
and
knowledge
.
In other words
, they find it difficult to
work
.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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some of them cannot deal with their employers.
As a result
, they can leave their
work
because of not
to deal
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dealing
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with it.
For example
,
young
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a young
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employee leaves a
job
so that he or she does not manage to
work
there.
However
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,However
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employers and
well-
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well-experienced
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experience
workers should cooperate with
the
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apply
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young employees. They ought to give their excellent advice to the person who is
a
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apply
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lack
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lacks
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experience
.
For instance
, when
young
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a young
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worker comes to
work
in the office they are not able to deal with their
job
although
they have
knowledge
about
work
.
Therefore
senior workers should advise them
how
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on how
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to
work
there and how to deal with colleges. Their advice can
useful
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be useful
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for young
people
in order to
work
their
job
for a long time. In conclusion, nowadays most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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young
people
cannot
work
somewhere as they
have
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apply
show examples
lack
of
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apply
show examples
experience
and
knowledge
.
Therefore
their boss and senior workers should give them beneficial advice in order to not suffer from
lack
of
experience
. I have tried to my handy answers and provide relevant answers to the questions.
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