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the graph below shows average carbon dioxides emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons were relevant

the graph below shows average carbon dioxides emission per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons were relevant
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The line graph demonstrates average carbon dioxide emissions per person in metric
tones
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 between 1976 and 2007. It shows
this
 average in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.
Overall
, the graph illustrates changes
of
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 emissions
about
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 four countries in five different years. It is observed that
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 the highest level of carbon dioxide emissions per person is for the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and
also
 the lowest level is for
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Portugal in 1967.
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Italy and
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Portugal had a huge increase generally
while
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Sweden and the united
kingdom
 had
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 slight decrease.
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, the average of carbon dioxide in
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Sweden started from 8
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 in 1967 and it rose slightly up to 10
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.
In addition
, it went down hugely for three years.
While
,
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 the united
kingdom
 range started from 11
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 and
it
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went down slightly up to 8
tones
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tones, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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