The charts below shows the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrate the average % in daily meals of 3 types of nutrients,
such
as sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. These nutrients may have some negative effects
to
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the whole body
,
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if a person
consume
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it
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too much.
To sum up
everything, there are some facts that need take into consideration. Near
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half of individuals
prefet
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prefer
to eat sodium at
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dinner time.
In addition
to it, saturated fat
also
had the same situation, like 37% at dinner too.
Moreover
, people like to add sugar
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snacks. First of all, the sodium chart shows that 29% of individuals like it at
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lunchtime
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, and only a small minority
respondents
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eat it at breakfast and snacks. The next one
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demonstrated that fat is popular at lunch and
also
21% for snacks.
Last
but not least, sugar is important to add at dinner, at lunch and
then
at breakfast time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentage
  • typical meals
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • saturated fats
  • sodium
  • added sugars
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • snacks
  • meal times
  • nutrient distribution
  • comparison
  • health implications
  • overconsumption
  • contain
  • levels
  • specific
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