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Some people think that it is better for a country's economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The importance of using
money
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 for different purposes or holding
money
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 for the
economy
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 of the state, which was always debatable, has now become more controversial. The substantial influence of allocating or saving
money
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 for the betterment of
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country's
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a country's
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economy
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 has sparked controversy over the potential impact of
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 trend on
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country
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the country
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 over the years. In my opinion, I agree that spending
money
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 on the
economy
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 of the homeland has certain advantages,
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, there are many disadvantages as well.
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 will lead to a logical conclusion. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why investing
money
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 by different means better for the
economy
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 of the
country
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, but the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that the
money
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 will circulate around all the classes of the
country
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.
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, a higher class person earns
money
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 and spends
money
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 by building a factory, lower class
people
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 will get employment and
also
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 cash for their needs.
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, a study published by the University of Manchester revealed that 80 per cent of the factories in the United Kingdom were owned by non-governmental persons.
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, individuals paying taxes to the
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also
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 helps
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government
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 to run the
country
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 better.
People
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 spending
money
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,
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, plays a vital role in the state
economy
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as well as
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 helps provide jobs to low-class
people
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.
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, fewer individuals know the benefits of holding
money
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 in the banks for the state
economy
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, approaches to deal with the problems of sustaining
money
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 in national reserves are numerous, but the most effective one is that
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government
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the government
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 should make rules and regulations to strict rich
people
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 to invest
money
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 in national banks, which is not unattainable and impractical but comprehensive and feasible. Holding
money
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 in national reserves reduces the risks of exchange rates and it does not need to reserve currency to do trade.
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, a study published by the University of Regina revealed that 60 per cent of the national bank reserves are occupied by the local
people
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 of Canada.
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,
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government
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the government
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 should introduce awareness lectures and seminars on saving
money
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 for the
country
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's
economy
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. Saving
money
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,
therefore
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, plays an imperative role in
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the country
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country
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country's
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economy
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. In conclusion, Based on the above-mentioned facts, it can be concluded that the impact of holding or spending
money
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 is prominent and both of them have advantages as well,
although
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task response
Ensure that the essay directly addresses the prompt and fully discusses both sides of the argument. Make sure to provide a clear opinion with supporting arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on organizing the essay in a more logical and coherent manner. Provide a clear and structured introduction and conclusion, and ensure that each paragraph supports the main points effectively.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disposable income
  • Consumer expenditure
  • Economic growth
  • Financial security
  • Standard of living
  • Economic downturn
  • Savings rate
  • Investment
  • Infrastructure
  • Innovation
  • Market demand
  • Economic stability
  • Interest rates
  • Macroeconomics
  • Sustainable growth
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