some people believe that protection of environment is the governments duties while some believe its people duties. to what extend are you agree or disagree?

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When preserving
ecosystem
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is discussed, citizens can be separated
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two groups which are people who consider that it is an authority's duty,
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others believe society
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preponderance
reponsibility
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responsibility
. From my consideration, I determine that
public
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the public
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also
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have
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massive tasks
on
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in
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conserving our environment.
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, there will be explanations in the following paragraphs.
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with, collaboration among numerous stakeholders is necessary as a way to acquire
success
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the success
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of the program.
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, when policymakers release a policy which disallows to
exploitate
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exploitative
exploitation
forests
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of forests
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extremely, local communities can be encouraged to assist
implementation
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environment
like
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by
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reporting any illegal logging cases.
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,
protection
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biosphere can be maximal in view of
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parties
will
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that will
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participate.
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,
plethora
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a plethora
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of societies have
a
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the
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same portion
with
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as
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the authorities
due to
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they live near
to
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apply
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biosphere aspects
such
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as rivers, lakes, shores, etc.
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, they should know
about
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apply
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how to protect essential variables of nature.
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, when
population
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the population
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are educated, they are able to conserve living components.
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, several natives in Indonesia like
Dayak
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the Dayak
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tribe always protect
rain
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the rain
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forest. It is really essential for them in view of
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their
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live
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a
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apply
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notion that living
harmony
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in harmony
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in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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is required to avoid
from
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apply
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some catastrophes. From all the aforementioned, I redeclare my paradigm that
between
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the bureaucracy and its citizen have
equivalent
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an equivalent
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portion. Without any public support, protecting nature can be
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a predicament
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due to
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several regulations cannot be applied and there is no party which wants to preserve it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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