Since science and technology are becoming more and more important in modern society, schools should spend more time on teaching these subjects rather on arts and humanities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It can be claimed that in the modern
world
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technologies
are intruding into our
lives
more and more. We are literally surrounded by them. We use our gadgets to reach many different goals, move by modern various
vechicles
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vehicles
like cars with some futuristic options or some kinds of electric transport.
Undoubtely
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Undoubtedly
, modern
technologies
make people’s
lives
easier and better. Mobile phones
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a very bright example of it. Via
them
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we can do various things from just
play
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video games or
watch
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videos to study or run own
business
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. Current
technologies
also
help us to do several tasks at the same time.
For example
, you can work on your laptop and talk on the phone,
while
the washing machine is cleaning your clothes and the dishwasher is washing the dishes.
That is
why many people believe that
technologies
improve their
lives
and make them easier.
However
, there is a big number of people who have another point of view. They think
due to
modern
technologies
humanity is becoming lazier and even less productive. Gadgets are often a distracting factor not only for children and teenagers
,
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but
also
for many adults.
Moreover
,
technologies
push us to move less, because we go
to
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somewhere by modern transport, order food to our houses and entertain
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TV or smartphones. Personally, I would
be tend
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of
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position
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of people, who believe that modern
technologies
affect
to
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our
lives
well and definitely make it easier and more productive. Because they provide us
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a
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plenty of opportunities and if you are a person, who can use it correctly, your life will have a better quality and you will be happy
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