Since science and technology are becoming more and more important in modern society, schools should spend more time on teaching these subjects rather on arts and humanities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It can be claimed that in the modern

world

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technologies

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are intruding into our

lives

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more and more. We are literally surrounded by them. We use our gadgets to reach many different goals, move by modern various

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vehicles

like cars with some futuristic options or some kinds of electric transport.

Undoubtely

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Undoubtedly

, modern

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make people’s

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easier and better. Mobile phones

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a very bright example of it. Via

them

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we can do various things from just

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video games or

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videos to study or run own

business

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. Current

technologies

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also

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help us to do several tasks at the same time.

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, you can work on your laptop and talk on the phone,

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the washing machine is cleaning your clothes and the dishwasher is washing the dishes.

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why many people believe that

technologies

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improve their

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and make them easier.

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, there is a big number of people who have another point of view. They think

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modern

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humanity is becoming lazier and even less productive. Gadgets are often a distracting factor not only for children and teenagers

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but

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for many adults.

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technologies

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push us to move less, because we go

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somewhere by modern transport, order food to our houses and entertain

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ourselves by

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TV or smartphones. Personally, I would

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position

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of people, who believe that modern

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affect

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our

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well and definitely make it easier and more productive. Because they provide us

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plenty of opportunities and if you are a person, who can use it correctly, your life will have a better quality and you will be happy

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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