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The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and sea World from 2001-2005. the bar chart shows the most popular rides and attractions in Disneyland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows visits to Disneyland and sea World from 2001-2005. the bar chart shows the most popular rides and attractions in Disneyland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who visited
Disneyland
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 and sea World from 2001-2005. The second bar chart depicts the famous rides and attractions in
Disneyland
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.
Overall
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, the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 to
Disneyland
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 and Sea World happened in 2005. The lowest
number
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 of
visitors
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 was in 2001. The most popular ride in
Disneyland
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 was splash mountain, and the lowest was a jungle cruise. The blue line graph shows the people who visited
Disneyland
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. The
number
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 started in 2001 at 9
million
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 and extremely increased every year, in 2005 the
number
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 was 51
million
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 which was the highest. The red line graph depicts
visitors
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 who visited Seaworld. The calculation began in 2001 at 11
million
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 guests and rose till 20015 at 27
million
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 people. The trend increased for
Disneyland
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 and SeaWorld in 2005. The famous attraction in
Disneyland
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 was Splash Mountain with 12
million
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 guests. Following by a Haunted mansion with 9
million
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visitors
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.
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Big Thunder Mountain got 4
million
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 in attendance. Metter haunt bob sledge just got 3
million
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visitors
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 and the most unpopular ride was the jungle cruise, the attraction just got 2
million
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 guests.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, disneyland, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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