The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
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The first line graph shows the data for tourists who travelled by train and the other line gives information on the
proportion
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of on-time running of trains in Sydney between the
years
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1995 and 2004. A period of 10
years
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.
Overall
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, it can seem that in the
year
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,2001 the number of people who travelled to Sydney was the highest and the lowest was in 1995. For another line graph in the
years
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1999 and 2002 was the highest and there has the same percentage of on-time running.
In contrast
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, the lowest on-time running was 2004.
Firstly
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, the highest
proportion
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of the
year
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tourist travelling by train was 300
million
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. Followed by the
year
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2002 was 280
million
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and 2003 was 278
million
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respectively.
On the other hand
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, the lowest was 250
million
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.
Secondly
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, the highest
proportion
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of on-time running was 93 per cent in the two
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1999 and 2002 and declined in 2003 was 90 per cent.
In addition
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, in the
year
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2004 the
proportion
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rapidly declined was 71 per cent.
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