You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter, •explain why you would like the job •give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ •say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australiac

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter in response to your advertisement posted in the “New Town” Australian magazine. I would like to express my interest in living with your family and looking after your ward for six months. Let me explain my situation to you in detail below. I am new in Melbourne City and have been looking for a part-time job for a few weeks.

This

job interests me not only because I love kids but

also

because I would like to learn about the country’s culture and traditions as I am studying master’s in psychology at a renowned institute. I believe I would be a suitable person to employ as I have prior experience in child care in my home town.

Moreover

, I have worked at a preschool for some time

as well as

completed a degree in child psychology. Having said that, since it is only a few hours of work, during my free time, I would be working on my assignments and attending classes in order to complete my education. Please do let me know if you have any questions. Looking forward to a positive response. Yours faithfully, Kathleen Holst

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

197 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Greeting

A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

At the present time,the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Violence in playgrounds is increasing. However, it is important that parents should teach children not to hit back at bullies. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.