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some employers offer their employees subsided membership of gyms and sports club.believing that it will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work.Others see no benefit in doing so.Discuss both views and give your opinion

#employers #offer #employees #membership #gyms #sports #club #staff #work #benefit
Few entrepreneurs to make their workers stronger and healthier, give them a good opportunity to start being a member in different
sport
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centers
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, gyms and clubs.
However
, employees are divided into two groups, part of which think that it will not impact well and the second one is not against
about
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it.
This
 essay will discuss
such
 kind of decision of employers and I will make my own point of view about it.
First
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The first
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 thing, which is worth mentioning, is that
work
 in offices can make staff a bit exhausted and tired, because of too
much task
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many tasks
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, that were given by
employer
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the employer
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.
As a result
, sitting at the computer or writing documents for 6-9 hours, make
person's
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 all muscles not
be
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active,
that
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 will lead to negative consequence when they are 50 or 60 years old,
such
 as troubles with vision and posture will not be functioned.
Next
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The next
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 coming
arguement
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argument
 is as essential as the first one,
that
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 concerns their emotional position. When people are angry and not in the mood, just to make them calm and less
nervious
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nervous
, the best thing to solve it, is to go to the gym boxing or
kicking
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punching
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a punching
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bag
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. It really helps and
also
 releases
of
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dopamine from the organism.
However
, if
worker
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a worker
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 decides not to go to the
sport
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 club and continue stressing, it will impact badly not only on the quality of
work
,
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 but
also
 on his mental health. So, just to avoid any depression, stressing or being always
nervious
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nervous
, people can only go to the gym and spend there almost 1,5-2 hours.
To conclude
, in my opinion, just to do
work
 and tasks well, not to be angry and
nervious
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nervous
 every day, employees definitely should go to the gym. And
that is
 not a secret that, you should attend any
sport
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 clubs or gyms
,
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 if you want not only to keep fit, to be stronger and healthier, but
also
 to keep calm, stay refreshed, be
positive-thinking
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a positive-thinking
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 person and make
the
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work
 well.
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