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modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. this has have negative effect on their social lives.

#forms #communication #email #amount #time #people #friends #effect #lives
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email
including
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and
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 messaging have decreased the quantify of time
people
 pay out meeting with their
friends
,
this
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and this
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 has
have
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 a negative impact on their social existence. I strongly opine that
,
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 messaging and
email
 can not influence
on
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people
's
life
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lives
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 and their relationships, cause of social
medias
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media
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,
people
 can communicate with each other, even if, between them
is
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a long distance.
To begin
 with, messaging
help
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helps
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 us, to do not forget about our
friends
, even if, we are far away from our hometown and close
for
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to
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 us
people
. We can talk with each other cause of
email
 and
messagings
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messages
.
In addition
, if you are throwing a party
such
 as
,
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birthday
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a birthday
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 bash, you can send an invitation letter to your
friends
, and thanks to
email
 you can meet with your
friends
,
therefore
,
messagings
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messaging
messages
 is a really good way to be in touch.
Email
 and sending messages
has
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have
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a tons
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tons
a ton
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 of bad sides too. First and foremost, even if,
people
 are in the same town but they whatever chatting with each other, and do not meet,
in
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on
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this
 occasion,
messagings
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messaging
messages
 can have
an adverse effects
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
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 on
people
's
life
. Plus, if
person
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a person
the person
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 will stay at home,
do
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does
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 not go out, and any relationships only
at
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via
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emails
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email
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,
person
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a person
the person
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 becomes closed.
To conclude
, my own view on the matter is, messaging and
email
have
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do have
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 not
bad
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a bad
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affect
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effect
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 on
people
's
life
. Thanks to
email
,
people
 keep in touch with their close for them
people
,
furthermore
, we can not put
a
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the
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 blame on social
medias
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media
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 for making
people
's
life
 more easier
,
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apply
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 and helping them to be in touch with each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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