All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having having a range of subjects is better for children's future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There are some arguments between the parents that discuss
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the
kids
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should be learnt some social
skills
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at
school
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instead
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of studying numerous
subjects
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, which some people believing is good for children's future.
Although
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learning many
subjects
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at
school
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could set an important step for their
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education, I believe that teaching community
skills
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is more crucial and necessary for their
life
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. On the one hand, some important
subjects
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,
such
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as math, science, physics, and chemistry should be paid attention to in the early studying process because they are quite useful in high
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and give the students more choices and opportunities in their
life
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.
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, a student with a good knowledge of some necessary
subjects
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can have a chance to choose their favourite job with a high income, these
kids
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will not have limited options to choose their career and in a shortage of standard living. I believe that these
kids
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will have unlimited choices to choose from, but they will get into some trouble in society without any solution thinking.
On the other hand
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, children who have studied some social
skills
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like problem-solving
skills
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and communication
skills
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will have more advantages in their later
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. People who have learnt these
skills
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while
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they're studying at
school
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have more confidence than those who don't. They can show off themselves and be a leader if they have confidence,
brave
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, and a good mindset to address any potential troubles.
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, some famous businessmen,
such
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as Donald Trump and Jack Ma can lead their companies really well and they get lots of revenue every year through their leadership
skills
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, independent thinking, and good problem-solving
skills
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. They would not be successful if they
lack
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these
skills
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. I strongly believe that learning these
skills
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at
school
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is a necessary thing that could help
kids
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in their future
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life
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. In conclusion, studying a variety of
subjects
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can give children multiple options for their careers, but lacking Social
skills
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can give them more trouble in later
life
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.
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