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The graph lines the differences of female unemployment between four contries for two years. All this countries in the UK.

#lines #differences #unemployment #four #contries #two #years #countries #uk
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The graph lines the differences
of
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 female
unemployment
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 between four
contries
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countries
 for two years. All
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this
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 countries
in
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are in
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 the UK.
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, all countries lowered on
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of
unemployment
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, only
Scotland
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 rose on
this
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 ranking.The biggest
difference
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of
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percentage
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 was in Northern
Ireland
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 - exactly, one
percent
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per cent
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. In
the
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2013
in
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England was the highest
percentage
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 of
unemployment
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between
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among
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 females,
however
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, in 2014 the first place was in
Scotland
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. After England and
Scotland
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 in 2013
was
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were
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 Northern
Ireland
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 with 5.6% .
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, in 2014 Northern
Ireland
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maked
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made
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bigger
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a bigger
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difference
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 than Wales,
there by
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thereby
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jumped
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 on the top. The
difference
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 between
two
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the two
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 years in England was only 0.3% and
this
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 is smaller than in Wales - 0.4%.
This
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 is
a positive information
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, that
unemployment
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between
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among
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 females fell, in comparison with
Scotland
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 with
increasing
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an increasing
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percentage
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. Getting back to the details, the biggest
difference
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 was in Northern
Ireland
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. If total
percentage
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 of
unemployment
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 in 2013 was 23.9%,
while
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 in 2014 was - 22.8%.
According to
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this
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these
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 facts, we can recognise that
percentage
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 of
unemployment
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 between
four
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the four
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 countries decreased
more
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by more
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 than one
percent
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per cent
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.
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