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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for the teacher in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #role #teacher #classroom
The progress
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 exists and must be
achived
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achieved
 in all spheres of
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humanity’s activity. We consider
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economic
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like
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 one aspect of
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global development, its importance in our world
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could be neglected
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as another
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another different infrastructures
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another different infrastructure
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 to make priority on the exact sector, in accordance with the opinion of many governments. On the one hand, an
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economy’s
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 evolution is crucial for people, because a lot of other activities depend on it.
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, without the control of
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 turnover, our civilization couldn’t be managed at all.
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 sphere affords us to
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observe
 a market situation and
also
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 possibility to count an expenditure and
also
 to distribute
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wealth.
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, states haven’t
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 their eyes
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another aims
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.
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, there are fields, which must be
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served
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progressive
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 society like various areas of science, politics,
law
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and law
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. These provide
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 stability and elaboration.
A neglect
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 can cause issues
concern
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 a nation’s
existance
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existence
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their
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its
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 attitude towards a government,
due to
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of
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 a country’s evaluation.
Therefore
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 a
result
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 we obtain meetings and
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 from folks, owing to a local policy, which prefers to focus on
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 benefits.
Such
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 can’t be sustainable, and individuals have an appropriate worldview, who disagree with
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 complex deal and think, that other types of progress are equally significant for a state. In conclusion, I would like to express
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 opinion, that we haven’t to emphasize
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one goal.
Besides
, human
being
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beings
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 should stick to
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advancement in every field of environment,
however
, it’s difficult, but it doesn’t cancel the fact that organizations need to be encouraged, which handle these questions.
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