In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasis that their products are new in some ways. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It has been seen that individuals are making business through the advertisement
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their new
products
which leads
a
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huge
profit
. Even though it proves beneficial to
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business but
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consider that it is a negative development because of
waste
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the waste
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of older gadgets and
waste
of precious
money
. In the modern era of science and technology, individuals are
dwalling
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dwelling
in
21st
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century and it is well known that most masses prefer to
purchase
new
technology based
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gadgets even their older
once
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ones
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are working on a wall condition which will be beneficial for those
correporation
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corporations
corporation
who want to earn huge amount of
profit
with their product that they have launched
such
as
iPhone
14 as
their
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are all similar features as in
iPhone
13 even individuals tend to
purchase
new one
due to
trend. Indeed, in the United States of America,
salers
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sales
earned a massive amount by advertisement of
iPhone
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iPhones
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which will
based
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on
latest
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the latest
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technology, in order to show their status that how much they are financially strong
due to
this
it proves beneficial for those who are gaining
profit
from their
products
.
However
,
their
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are certain disadvantages
of
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this
trend.
Firstly
, it will impact on
environment
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.
Secondly
, it is
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totally
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waste
of precious
money
.
For example
, in California, Apple company makes
iPhone
which contains similar features as earlier
iphones
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phones
iPhones
but
their
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is one difference which is in
design
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the design
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of
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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because of
this
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these
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people
prafer
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prefer
to
purchase
new ones and older gadgets will create problems
such
if the old
products
will not be recycled
then
the
matel
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metal
body will impact on
environment
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the environment
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, which leads harmful future.
Moreover
, it is found that about 72 per cent
folks
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of folks
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went to
purchase
iPhone
14 pro max on
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lunch day even though they have older
iphones
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iPhones
phones
but they became crazy for those items so it is
waste
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a waste
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of
money
. In conclusion,
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an advertisement
the advertisement
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advertisement
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advertising
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for new
products
can be beneficial for business because of a huge
profit
but in my
perspection
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perspective
, it is not only
waste
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a waste
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of
money
but it leads a harmful effect on
environment
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the environment
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which will spoil the future of
upcoming
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the upcoming
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generation.
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