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Traffic problems are increase in most cities. What can be done about this?

#traffic #cities
It is seen that people are facing
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increasing
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 severe
traffic
 congestion at peak hours worldwide. Many transportation solutions have been implemented to reduce
traffic
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 recently.
This
 essay will outline some of these solutions. One of the most effective ways to fight
traffic
 problems is to impose
higher
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price
 for petroleum. The cheap gasoline
price
 draws little
concerns
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 about driving
cost
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. Take Cairo Metropolis Area as an example. The majority of
traffic
 issue is caused by private cars
due to
 the affordable fuel
price
. If the
prices
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 of petrol
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 higher,
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people will consider
to opt
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 for other modes of transport for their travel
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. Another way to address the problem is to develop the attractiveness of public transport. Whether public
ride
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 can be a convenient experience is the biggest concern
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 passengers. We usually hear people complaining about
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 when waiting for buses in a bad weather
condition
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such
 as
rainy
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, snowy or hot day. Not only that but the choices of destination
also
 drive the consumers' demand. The more destinations are provided, the more customers choose to use. In conclusion, gridlock is not a unique problem of any country, but a global issue. Any successful solution from one country can be applied in another. For the time being, higher petrol
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 and good public transport are still 2 rational solutions.
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