Some people think that strick punishment for driving offences are key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however believe that other measures would improve road safety. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays and age
road
accidents were
main
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problem for human life. Some
people
believe that by high fines
this
problem can be solved. Others consider that other precautions would improve
road
safety. In
this
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I will discuss both sides of
this
argument and will include my own opinion.
First,
I agree with
this
statement that punishment can help
reducing
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traffic accidents.
People
will follow
rules
if they will not drive attentively on
road
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.
Moreover
,
people
who drive by taking alcohol or drug
they
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have to
arrested
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, pay big amount of money and
driving
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a driving
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license have to
taken
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from them.
People
will fear and obey
rules
by
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this
way. Turning to the other side of the argument, In my opinion, there
are
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should be other precautions.
For instance
,
road
rules
should teach children
at
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the
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secondary schools.
Besides
,
government
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the government
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should promote
this
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issues on TV, radio, and on postcards. In
additionally
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, there is
other
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problem that government should solve. The exam for
driving
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a driving
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license should be transparent and
fear
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.
By
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this
way,
people
who know
rules
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the rules
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better
they
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apply
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will pass
exam
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the exam
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.
To conclude
all mentioned above for
road
safety
it
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should be strict punishment and at the same time there are other measures for
road
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the road
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.
For example
, advertisements about
road
safety should promote everywhere.
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