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The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie graphs illustrate
the
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both British percentages indicating several reasons
of
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 immigration and
emmigration
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emigration
immigration
 in 2007.
Overall
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, people tended to come in and out
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this
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of this
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counry
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country
 in
quest
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the quest
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for
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of
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 opportunities for employment and education.
To begin
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 with immigration, 30% of
immigarnts
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immigrants
 moved to the UK to look for
the
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 steady job
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 12% of them required employment whether full-time or part-time.
Besides
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, foreign students
also
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 dominated just over a
quater
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quarter
 of the
propertion
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property
. The figure of
foreigner
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foreigners
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 who wanted to accompany
this
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 kingdom stood at 15% and those who came with other
motivetions
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motivations
resistered
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resisted
 11%
whereas
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 6% of immigrants did not mention any reasons.
On the other hand
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, as for British citizens, about
a
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half of
emigrants
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the emigrants
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 soak work in 2007.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, people who answered
other
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for other
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 or no reasons or who just wanted to move showed their rate at more or less 15%.
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,
nterestingly
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interestingly
, only 4% of people who emigrated attributed their reason to
the
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 academic qualification.
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