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Nowadays, a lot of people use credit cards for online shopping. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 handle
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 for shopping or using services,It is most popular nowadays because new technology is given more facilities for using
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 .The
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 has many advantages but fewer disadvantages .
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 essay will explain more advantages of
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 overcome to disadvantages .
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 I strongly believe
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 promotion business and serving
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's time wastage, because
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 do not necessarily
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withdraw money and carry over money .Other hand
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 can safely anything purchase from international online marketing it is
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 given a better effect on the economy .,
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 have many benefits
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 as a grease period for payments and discounts for some products .
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 nowadays
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 have high-security protection with technology
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 as SMS OPT, Identification facilities and mobile
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 some disadvantages ,mainly
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 do have not well knowledge about how to handle a
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 ,For ,example some
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 are not interested in cyber security so
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 can be trouble with scrums and others can get into financial trouble,because they without proper manage use
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 and their families have face to financial matter ,
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 call as the effect of Microcredit To summarize the above three sections, nowadays
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 are busy with their work and they have limited time for shopping and using other services .That reason
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 have to choose online purchases doing by safe ways ,so the best option purchase through a
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 has so many positive things than negative effects.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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