Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In

this

contemporary era , everyone follows a hectic schedule and they

forgot

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that refreshing their

mind

is an indispensable part of their life . A myriad of people

considers

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that official authorities should invest in public services

instead

of entertainment sources.

This

essay will discuss my complete disagreement with the notion extensively in subsequent paragraphs. To commence, there are a plethora of reasons but the most preponderant is recreating the

mind

. To expound , nowadays individuals follow a complex timetable

as well as

they fail to relax their minds

due to

which they become victims of several diseases like depression, tension and so on.

However

, only by

giving

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taking

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a break from the ongoing schedule people can relax by utilising their time in theatre and music resulting which they can focus more on work with a relaxed

mind

and the outcome will be far better than before .

For instance

, a survey was conducted by the local authorities that there were two groups, group A who work 24 ×7 and another group B who go for recreational activities on weekends and after a month it was concluded that Team B was more productive, effectively

along with

efficiency as they gave a break to their schedule. Moving ahead , by investing in art Government provides employment opportunities to its citizens . To explain , It is vastly observed that various masses are unemployed and if supreme power invests in arts

so

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apply

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an overwhelming majority of people can get a job and earn standard livelihood and

this

income will be added to our GDP and

this

is a positive and healthy development for the country . To exemplify, a report published by a renowned NGO that these theatres are the one of sources to employ a significant proportion of persons resulting in which unemployed

can vanish

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from the nation.

Hence

these

all

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apply

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reasons stand in good stead .

To conclude

, there are ample reasons to oppose the statement but the most imperative is to recreate an individual's

mind

as well as

to provide employment opportunities in the market . In my prospects ,

Government

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the Government

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has the power to break a nation and make a nation . So , expending money on arts like theatre and music will assist in

incline

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increasing

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the GDP of the country and provide standard quality services to the citizens of the country.