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Some people feel that manufacturer and supermarket have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods.others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Certain people believed that it is the responsibility of  producers and shopping malls to limit the packaging of
goods
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. Others think clients should not buy
goods
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 with too much customizing.
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 essay will throw light on both perspectives and In my opinion, I would say it is the job of the maker of an item to reduce the  number casing of
goods
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. Admittedly, a shopper can decide not to purchase a good if it has a lot of wrapping because
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 may tend to increase the weight of the item
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, when you go to a mall to buy a wristwatch
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 supposed to be handy and portable and you were given an object that occupies a whole polythene bag. You may not find
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 funny as
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 is not what you expected.
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 stuff will be sent to another location definitely the price will be higher than sending just the wristwatch alone.
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, it is the sole role of the manufacturer to remove excess packing on the
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. The maker should use the appropriate casing for the furnishings that will be succinct and will not be too much since they know the worth of the item.
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, if the packing of the wristwatch is heavy and the purchaser decides to not buy it it will be a loss on the side of the retailer. In conclusion, the creator of a particular piece of equipment has the responsibility of decreasing the wrapping. Others believed that the shopper should not purchase
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 items. The extra cost of packing when transporting it to another location is on the side of the consumer.
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, the manufacturer is in the best to position to do
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