The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart gives information about
the
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further
education
in Britain making a comparison between men and women. It
also
illustrates who attended full-time or part-time
education
in three specific periods.
Overall
, the number of young people who studied
part time
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is extremely greater than the ones who chose full-time. In fact
men
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and women's
average
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never reach more than 300 thousand people.
In
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the other
hand
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the lowest data that shows full-time students is almost 800 thousand.
This
means that since 1970 students have considered
more
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convenient
studying
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for a shorter period of time per day. The average of girls
into
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both full-time and part-time
education
occured
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occurred
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growth every ten years. As well the little amount of men who chose full-time has increased by only 50
thousands
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every ten years. In 1990/91 part-time
education
drastically has grown reaching the highest,
while
full-time
education
seems to be the exact amount for both
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: around 300 thousand.
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