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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods.Other argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many individuals opined that branding and rebranding of goods is the
solely
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 duty of
producer
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producers
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 and stores
while
other
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others
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 argued that consumers should not
patronized
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 commodities with excess packaging.
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 essay will discuss both views with relevant examples and give a conclusion. On the one hand,
packaging
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 of material is solely the duty of the company, but most producer will was to
packaged
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 their products in
such
 a way that it will
makes
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it
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them
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 attractive to the buyer, because of the competition in
labour
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 market.
For instance
, some individual
prefer
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 to purchase commodities that was well wrapped because they believe it looks presentable especially when they
wants
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 to present
it
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them
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 as a gift.
Also
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this
 increased the price of a product
thus
 making it to be expensive than other goods lightly wrapped.
On the other hand
,
customer
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customers
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 should not
patronized
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patronise
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 commodities that are excessively
package
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packaged
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this
we
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apply
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enlightened the producer to reduce the way a product is been tied.
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,a particular item has
highest
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 patronage because it was  pocket friendly and
lot
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a lot
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 of people brought it and the product was fantastic. In conclusion, when goods are packed in a fancy manner
this
 increased patronized and consumer
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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