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A lot of people believe that the producer's and supermarket have the responsibility in reducing the way they package their goods, Why others think people should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging

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lot
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 of
people
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 believe that the producers and supermarkets have the responsibility in reducing the way they package their
goods
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, Why
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other's
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think
people
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 should avoid buying
goods
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 with a
lot
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 of packaging
.
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 In my own
opinion
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 I believe the producer and supermarket should reduce their packaging ways, in other to make it affordable for
people
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.
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 essay will be
further
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 explained in subsequent paragraphs.   recently, some producers and supermarket package their
goods
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 in ways which make it difficult for many
people
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 to purchase.
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, when you purchase a pair of shoes from the store,
instead
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 of
them
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having them
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 to hand over
it
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to you in
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simple way
,
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when it's over-packed, it may become a heavy load for you, and
this
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 may likely increase the cost of transporting
this
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goods
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 from one place to another.
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,  I will advise
people
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 should stop buying
goods
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 with a
lot
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 of packaging and go for what they can afford,  or the
goods
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 they can see with their eyes. Cux most of the
goods
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 that
was
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packaged may not be what they are expecting when they open it.
Goods
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 that are not packaged, can
also
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 be more  affordable than the packaged
one's
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.  In ,conclusion I will advise the producer and the retailer or supermarket should work on the way they package their
goods
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 to make it affordable. I
also
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 advise
people
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 should go for what they can afford, by avoiding
goods
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 with a
lot
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 of packaging.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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