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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It has become a trend in
modern day
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 society whereby people tend to display fake show off. Many producers present their
products
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 in an attractive packet and they claim that the packaged
goods
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is
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 more significant than the
products
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look
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that look
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 alike
which
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 are not packaged.
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 some people believe that
product
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 packaging plays a role in the failure or success of the
goods
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, others argue that the amount of wrapping for a
product
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 has devastating implications
on
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 the environment.
This
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 with, packaging is prevalent these days and almost everything we buy is wrapped. Excessive wrapping has demonstrated a disastrous impact on the environment including the loss of resources like energy and water. In
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 case,
product
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 providers can play a role in deciding which
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needs
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 packaging and what size is appropriate as some manufacturers
tends
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 to wrap every
product
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 in order to attract intended customers. They can consider
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 package with relevant information about the
goods
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 without ambiguous presentations. Meanwhile, customers can equally contribute to the reduction of the unnecessary
wastes
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 created by packaged
goods
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 in order to contribute to a better environment.
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 can be achieved when consumers decided to buy
least
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 packaged
products
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 where possible
especially
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 by avoiding
goods
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 with large wrappings if they're not a necessity.
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, customers can buy bulk
goods
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 so that they can be wrapped in a single pack thereby reducing
wastes
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 caused by the wrappings. In conclusion, the
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 produced by wrapping
of
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goods
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 can lead to environmental pollution and harm as it is
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 a waste of resources. So we ought to reduce the amount of packaging of
products
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 as much as we could,
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 not buying wrapped
goods
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 because they're attractive when they're not necessarily needed.
This
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 means that both
provider
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 and consumers have a part to play
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 effect
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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