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Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods.other argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and gives your opinion

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Packaging is the key production for people to purchase which cannot be stopped by both producers and retailers with the following illustrations.wrapping makes goods more attractive inside and out,
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 prevents copyright, and more so it adds value to a product. These points will be
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 explained with relevant examples and a logical conclusion in the subsequent paragraphs. The word attraction means the power of evoking interest in something.
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, I wanted to buy cassava flour and I saw one cover and the other one uncovered which is
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 surrounded by rodents. Sure I will definitely get the first stuff because I believe it is safe for human consumption,of which the processing might be wrong too.
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, it
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 limits copyright,a well-wrapped stuff is well known by its identity.
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,bread barkers have different producers which can only be known by its tag.Is not possible to use other people's company names for different products.if done is it a criminal offence under the law
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, the value of the product
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 increases and people know it for either good or bad stuff.
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 it makes it more expensive because of the covering. These can
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 reduce production when the cost is on the high side for consumers. It
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 gives room for spoilage, which causes a shortage of income. Consumers are advised to limit unnecessary covered products,in order to lower cost and focus on other important things. More so it was met to know that not all protected foods have good processing. In ,conclusion manufacturers and supermarkets will not reduce the amount of packaging of goods because of the befitting outlook and the value it added to goods.
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