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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some customers think that shopping malls and producers have the duty to cut down the price of packaged
items
,
while
 others suggest that customers should not
purchase
 packaged
items
. Packaged
items
 are mostly expensive, it is usually available for instant
consumptions
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, and the materials and commodities used in processing
it
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makes
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it
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them
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 more expensive. These
items
 are easy to get and
reduces
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reduce
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stress
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 of
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, its usually refined, processed, preserved to prevent spoilage and ready for instant consumption.
However
,
due to
 the cost of the packaged
items
, some consumers cannot afford to
purchase
 the
items
, and they
belive
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 that the producers and
also
 the supermarkets have a duty to reduce the price
,
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 since so much has been put in place to repackage those
items
, the cost can be cut down but there might be
reduction
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 in the quantity.
Moreover
, other consumers do not want to
purchase
 these packaged
items
, they would rather go the unbranded
items
 that are affordable to them. In my opinion,
items
 that are rebranded should not be expensive but cheap with high quality and low quantity to enable every customer to
purchase
it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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