The Line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The Line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The Line graph illustrates the total number of people that visited a
museum
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in the United Kingdom during the hot and cold seasons in the year 2003 and the time used.
Overall
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, the time spent for both seasons (summer and winter) reached a peak in the morning.
Firstly
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, during summer, guests who visited the
museum
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rose dramatically from no guests to about 1300 guests at 10:00 in a year,
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later rose steadily within 10:30 to 11:30, and
this
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increase to 1400 visitors.
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, the total of people who visited gallery decline slowly to approximately 800 visitors which was within the range of 11:30 to 16:00 hours.
On the other hand
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, at winter period, who went to
museum
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increased steadily from 0 to 450 foreigner at 10:00 but the visits got fluctuated within 10:00 to11:30.
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, the number of people who visited the
museum
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reduced drastically to zero at 14:30 time of the year. The number of visitors remain the same since after
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.
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