Some people feel that manufacturer and supermarket have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed by the group of an individual
that is
a
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duty of producers and marketers to minimize the number of package
goods
but some people are not in support of
this
opinion. I concur with the opinion saying the amount of good packaging should be reduced as whatever the makers are packaging will definitely be paid for by consumers and might even reduce the quality of the
product
.
This
will be
further
explained in subsequent paragraphs and a conclusion will be drawn.
To begin
with, it is
undeniable
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fact that the consumer will be at the receiving end of the charges spent on making the
goods
and
due to
this
, there will an inflation on the
goods
. No producer will want to run into debt.
Over packaged
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will not offer anything than to make the brands unaffordable to procure by the customers.
For instance
, a soap that is little packaged is sold for 500 nairas and the other stocks of the same quantity
sells
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for 3000 nairas just because of over package.
Although
,
on the other hand
, the way an individual present whatever he has so
also
the way people will admire and cherish it. But at the same
time
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products should be minimally packaged.
Secondly
, the majority of the apply packaged
product
are
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not as good as expected when
open
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it.
This
is
due to
loss
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a loss
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of focus on the
product
but rather on how they want to package and convince people to procure the
goods
. One clear example of
this
is a biscuit a friend bought for a child at the cost of 2500 naira which the expectation doesn't even meet what she got, the child eventually threw the
product
away and was satisfied with another
product
gotten for just a token.
This
is owing to so many things like diverse focused in the course of production aiming to present it with full packaging and
consequently
, some even get spoilt when masses can not afford to get it. Actually, not all the over-packaged
product
loses pleasure or spilt but majorly some of it does. In conclusion, I admit
the
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that
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producers and marketers should reduce the way of packaging
of
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goods
so
masses
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the masses
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can afford to procure
it
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them
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and
to
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apply
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also
prevent them from losing
focused
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focus
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on production.
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