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Some people feel supermarkets and manufacturers have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether industries or consumers should be responsible for the reduction in
over wrapping
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 of
products
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 displayed in stores.
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 essay will discuss both arguments and explain why I believe companies should make more efforts in boycotting excessive packaging. On the one hand, many producers manufacture commodities and put them in boxes as a means of attracting customers to buy their
products
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.
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, some of the materials that are used in making
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 packages are not eco-friendly and
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 led to the depletion of the ozone layers in recent years.
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this
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 reason, industries as a whole will benefit greatly from looking for environmentally friendly alternatives for their
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.
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, buyers
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 play a role in saving the earth from harmful activities by stopping the purchase of items wrapped in
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 amount of plastic covering.
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 will result in
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less demand for
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item
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items
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 and it will directly limit manufacturing, thereby causing a decline in sales.
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, in
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 the massive reduction in the purchase of packaged meat from a particular meat vendor led
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the company to invent jut
bag
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bags
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 for their meat sales.
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, customers can replace
nylon packed
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nylon-packed
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 groceries with
re-usable
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reusable
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 shopping bags that are not dangerous to the environment. In conclusion,
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although
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individuals have a role to play in the reduction of packaged
consumable
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consumables
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. I believe companies and shops have more responsibility in ensuring that their
products
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 are not detrimental to the ecosystem.
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