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The picture shows th process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Presented for consideration is the diagram illustrating the steps and equipment involved in the production of
wool
. From an
overall
 perspective, the process has multiple a number of stages starting from feeding sheep and ending with spinning balls of yarn. In the first place, sheep are kept at farms to feed. Fleeces are collected by farmers before cleaning. The sheep's hair after cleaning is dried by a special machine. After that, they are put into a carding tool to create raw yarn,
then
 they are tufted of
wool
 or produced in strings for recycling. Following the tuft of
wool
 step, products are put in storage for preservation.
Then
,
wool
 tufts are spun into balls of fleece. In the
last
 stage, these thread balls are sold for other individual pastimes, like knitting, or the commercial purpose of making jackets or carpets. These products are provided to us in different ways.
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