Some people think that computer games should be banned because they have a number of disadvantages. Other thinks that they have a lot of advantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although
computer
games
are looked down by
our modern society, still there are many Change preposition
upon by
people
who believe it
to be beneficial. Similar to the disadvantages of Correct pronoun usage
them
computer
games
, it contains some advantages too. On the one hand, children who play computer
games
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
that
the concentration and attention level of a person to a greater extent. Some Correct word choice
apply
says
playing Change the verb form
say
computer
games
are
not just about pressing buttons. Some video Change the verb form
is
games
are required to have analytics skills
to solve problems. This
can help to improve their logical thinking skills
. Secondly
, research have
shown playing Change the verb form
has
computer
games
can effectively relief
stress as a form of entertainment. Replace the word
relieve
On the other hand
, children who constantly playing
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play
computer
games
without self-control often become too addictive
to Replace the word
addicted
computer
games
. Secondly
, Constant playing computer
games
has a tendency to cause various psychological disorders such
as people
who suffer from anxiety, stress or even depression. Additionally
, while
playing computer
games
are proved
to improve concentration and Correct your spelling
proven
decision making
Add a hyphen
decision-making
skills
but on the other
hand
Add a comma
hand,
it
can cause serious Correct pronoun usage
they
effect
Fix the agreement mistake
effects
to
their education. Change preposition
on
Finally
, in my point of view
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view,
computer
games
can help generate huge opportunities and sources of income for thousands of people
. They are entertaining as well as
develop our cognitive skills
. However
, excess of anything is bad so are computer
games
. It leads to many health problems and distracts us from our life goals In conclusion, despite people
having different point
of view about Fix the agreement mistake
points
computer
games
. I believe it would be better for parents to keep an eye on their children when they are playing computer
games
when their brain
haven't fully developed yet.Fix the agreement mistake
brains
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