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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The maps illustrate the transformation of a University’s
sports
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 centre at present and the upcoming plans.
Overall
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, the most significant changes are likely to be the outdoor courts developed into various amenities
such
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 as a leisure pool,
sports
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 hall, and dance studios.
However
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, the centre Area of the sport layout tends to remain in the
future
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. To be specific the indoor pool
that is
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 surrounded by changing rooms, gym, sitting area, and reception is planned to remain in the
future
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. In the
future
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 plan, there is no more outdoor courts. By facing the reception, there is going to add a
sports
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 shop on the west
side
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 and a café on the east
side
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 of the reception. By going through both sides of the shop and café, there are plans to have a changing room in the western and Eastern corners. As for the
future
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 changing room in the west
side
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 corner, it is connected to the leisure pool which is going to be on the north
side
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. On the other
side
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, they are planning to build a
sports
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 hall in front of the changing room and to dance studio on the east
side
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 of the
sports
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 hall.
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