The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from the employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from the employers. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first
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illustration
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studying
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for 5 age groups (under 26; 26-29; 30-39; 40-49 and over 49). The
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career growth and as a hobby. And the second chart reflects the
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amount of
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that
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get from
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employers
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the age groups. There are 2 types of
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that
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could get the first one is time off and the second one is help with fees.
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, there are magnificent differences among the help percentages that
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decided to get a degree because they were interested in it, unlike
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younger
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that mostly went to the
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for academic
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. 80% of
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that were under 26 went to the
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because of their
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, and 10% of them went to the
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interest. But the academic reason has decreased gradually. The
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age group which is over 49 showed that only about 19% of them went to
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university
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due to
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academic
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.
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, the rate of
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that went to study for the interest has increased steadily. Because 70% of
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who were older than 49 went to the
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as a hobby or to learn something new and etc. The
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from the
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employers
got
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who were older
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26. Their percentage made up more than 60%.
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number has decreased till the
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that were 30-39. After the amount of
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started rising. So,
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that were older than 49 got almost 50% of help from their bosses.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, support, people, students, university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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