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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from the employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they recieved from the employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first
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illustration
 depicts the
reasons
of
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styding
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studying
styling
staying
 for 5 age groups (under 26; 26-29; 30-39; 40-49 and over 49). The
reasons
 are
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career growth and as a hobby. And the second chart reflects the
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amount of
support
 that
people
 get from
the
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employers
according to
 the age groups. There are 2 types of
support
 that
students
 could get the first one is time off and the second one is help with fees.
Overall
, there are magnificent differences among the help percentages that
students
 get, and
also
 I would like to mention that the biggest part of older
students
 decided to get a degree because they were interested in it, unlike
to
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younger
students
 that mostly went to the
university
 for academic
reasons
. 80% of
students
 that were under 26 went to the
university
 because of their
career
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careers
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, and 10% of them went to the
university
,
due to
the
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 interest. But the academic reason has decreased gradually. The
last
 age group which is over 49 showed that only about 19% of them went to
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university
due to
the
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academic
reasons
.
However
, the rate of
people
 that went to study for the interest has increased steadily. Because 70% of
people
 who were older than 49 went to the
university
 as a hobby or to learn something new and etc. The
bigggest
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biggest
 amount of
support
 from the
emploeyers
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employers
 got
people
 who were older
under
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 26. Their percentage made up more than 60%.
This
 number has decreased till the
people
 that were 30-39. After the amount of
support
has
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started rising. So,
students
 that were older than 49 got almost 50% of help from their bosses.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, support, people, students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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