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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
percentage
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 of students who entered four different types of secondary
schools
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 from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
percentage
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 of
pupils
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 attending 3 types of
schools
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 declined over the examined period,
while
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 the figure for community
schools
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 increased.
In addition
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, the
percentage
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 of
pupils
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 studying in specialist
schools
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 was the lowest. In 2000, the
percentage
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 of
pupils
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 attending voluntary-controlled
schools
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 was the highest, at 52%.
While
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 the figure for grammar
schools
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 was 24%, which was twice higher than that of specialist
schools
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, with 12%. There was a decline in the percentages of these
schools
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 in the next five years. Specialist
schools
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 witnessed a fall of 1% in the proportion of
pupils
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. The figures for grammar and voluntary-controlled
schools
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 decreased significantly to 19% and 38% in 2005, respectively.
In contrast
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, starting at 10%, the
percentage
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 of those who studied in community
schools
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 increased slightly to 32% and continued to rise to 32% in 2005, and
then
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 reached a peak at 58% in the
last
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 period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, schools, pupils with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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