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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Discuss the adventages and disadvantages of the two approaches.

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Many
persons
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 think that high school graduates should
travel
 or
work
 before they go to college. At a glance, the first thing to come up
it
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is the
time
 spent to do it so, the earliest the student enters to
univesity
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university
 the sooner they will finish their degree, but
besides
time
, are there good results behind taking
such
 a decision?
This
 essay will describe the benefits and drawbacks in regard to the aforementioned statement. There are several
advatages
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advantages
 of taking some
time
 off after
graduate
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 from high school, the most important one
,
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 is to have the opportunity to meet new people and new places, perhaps a whole new different culture if you have the chance to go abroad.
As a consequence
, students will have to manage
how
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what
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 it is like to be on their
owns
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, to find their own food and to administer their budget within
this
 period of
time
, among others; going through these basic
resposibilities
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responsibilities
allow
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allows
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 them to become more mature individuals and
therfore
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therefore
 be more
prepare
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 to face university lifestyle. Another important benefit of having
this
time
 off is getting a job.
This
 will teach graduates how to get
organise
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 and accomplished several
task
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tasks
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 in a daily manner and
gat
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get
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 paid in return,
as well as
 comply with schedule and certain rules within the
work
 environment.
This
 will teach individuals to understand the
importace
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importance
 of responsibility and the value of the
maney
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money
. Again,
this
 will positively impact
on
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students’ maturity and
therefore
 will help
to
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them to
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 face college.
On the other hand
, the disadvantage of taking some
time
 off to
travel
 is the cost that has to be invested to cover
travel
 expenses. Another drawback is the risk
for
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of
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 graduates
to get
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getting
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 used to
work
 and
lose
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losing
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 interest in going to college. As
an
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apply
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overall
 the benefits of
take
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taking
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 some
time
 to
work
 or
travel
 for graduated before they go to university are more than their drawbacks,
therefore
 it seems like a good idea.
Finally
, it is very important for them to
undestand
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understand
 that
this
 is for a limited period of
time
, so
as a result
 they need to be ready to quit
to
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working
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work
 or
travel
 when the
time
 comes.
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