Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? As world is moving forward towards the revolution of science and technological advancements.

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in some societies student's lack of interest in
science
is a major concern. There are numerous reasons for
this
problem. One of the major problems that students don't
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to select the
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of difficulty. The study curriculum is designed in a tough way which compels students to go for either arts subjects or other information technology topics
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related to computer engineering. High scale salary is offered to IT related
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a common perception for the demand of more
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jobs
. Another main reason is now youngsters
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a deep interest in entrepreneurship. Learners are more inclined towards selecting business modules at
university
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level
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the students with leadership mindset
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to avoid
science
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major effects on society. With the rise of population and
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the emergence
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of fatal
diseases
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there is a constant need for more doctors and medical staff, shortage of
these medical professional
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can create a chaotic situation in society.
Shortage
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A shortage
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of
science
teachers is another problem which could occur,
unavailability
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the unavailability
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of
science
professionals can lead to
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science
institutions and universities. Progress towards new research and development in sectors
such
as astronomy and advanced medicine could be impacted,
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these areas are
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the main
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focus of scientists in
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era. There is a need for awareness programs at
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level
to create interest
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science
in
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generation. Media can play
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role in
this
cause. Higher authorities of education need to check the complexity
level
of
science
studies at all levels.
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there is a role of parents and teachers to convey the importance of
science
subject and its
overall
impact on career. Efforts
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required on
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the government
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level
to create more
jobs
related to
science
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