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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

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Dear USAMA, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I am writing
this
 letter to you with regard to motivating and encouraging you for the new
school
 . I would appreciate it if could spare a few moments to consider my opinion.
Firstly
, I would like to provide some background information on the problems
to settle
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 into a new
school
. There were a lot of new people
such
 as teachers, students and staff who you are not familiar with. I got to know from your mother that you get discouraged and feel down. The situation prompted me to reach out to you in the hopes of seeking advice. I would like to highlight some key points regarding the solutions to difficulties facing fitting into a new
school
.
Firstly
, you should go cafe and other crowded areas of the
school
 and try to speak with the people. Try to talk with them on different topics, so that you get familiar with them and feel less lonely.
Secondly
, you should try to make interesting sports and other events happening in the
school
. Play different sports and participate in different co-curricular activities like swimming, painting competitions, and speech competitions.
Furthermore
, join clubs
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art, music etc at
school
 to kill your loneliness. Considering the aforementioned factors, I kindly request you to come home
in
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on
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school
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 bus rather than coming with your parents in
a
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private. I believe that
by
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with
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this
 move you will
get
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make
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 a lot of new friends.
Additionally
, I would be grateful if you provide some information
of
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about
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 your
school
,
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apply
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 so that I can visit your
school
 to help you. In conclusion, I sincerely appreciate your attention to
this
 matter, I am confident that with your support, you will figure out
to
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how to
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 escape from
this
 situation and will enjoy your
school
 life. I would be more than willing to discuss
further
 or provide additional information if required. Thank you for your time and consideration. Best wishes, MUHAMMAD RIZWAN SHAUKAT
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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