The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar graph illustrates the proportion of
women
and
men
test takers who passed their driving tests for licensure in an Asian country between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, the percentages of
the
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successful candidates
was escalating
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throughout the period whether their gender;
however
,
women
were more successful than their
men
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male
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counterparts for each year. First and foremost, almost half of
women
test takers passed their driving test with around 48% in 1980. After a slight incline in 1990, there was a
drammatic
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dramatic
improvement in 2000 with roughly 68% of
women
candidates, demonstrating
a
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peak
success
,
passed
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their licence exams. Eventually there was a mild drop of nearly 5% compared to the previous decade. Meanwhile, the
men
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male
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candidates started with
28
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a 28
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%
of
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success
ratio in 1980 which was the lowest proportion of achievement compared to each group's
success
for all years. Ultimately, their
success
improved gradually, and
reached
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almost half of
men
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the men
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receieved
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received
their driving
license
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licenses
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in 2000. After a decade, there was no significant
chance
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change
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observed.
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