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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic shows a breakdown of
crime
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 statistics in the UK for
last
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 year. The line graph shows the interrelation between criminal activity and
age
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while
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 the pie chart illustrates the proportion of four different
crime
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 types. When looking at the line graph it is immediately clear that young
people
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 accounted for a disproportionately high level of
crime
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last
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 year and that the
age
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 at which
people
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 are involved in criminal activity peaks at twenty with nearly a million
crimes
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 being committed by
people
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 of
this
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age
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. The number of
crimes
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then
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 plummeted before levelling off at 28. the likelihood of being involved in criminal activity continued to decline with
age
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. Of the
crimes
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 identified in the bar chart, violent
crime
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 was the most common at nearly half of the total, and there were twice as many
crimes
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 involving violence as there were property or drug
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crime
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crimes
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. Less serious
anti social
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anti-social
show examples
behaviour related
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behaviour-related
show examples
crime
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 was relatively low.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 young
people
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 were much more likely to be the perpetrators of
crime
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 and that the majority of
this
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crime
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 was violence related.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, people, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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