Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t.

These days it is broadly discussed that pro sportsmen are great examples of imitation.There are two groups of people first ones think that they will have a good influence,
while
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part of society disagrees with that. It is
evidently
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that people see that
athletes
can influence youngsters in a great way. First of all,because
sport
is
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of discipline
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sportsmen
always train and follow their plan of diet. Doing
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sport
is
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way to be healthy and fit there are a lot of
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types from hardest to easiest like fitness that can help to be in fine condition. All
this
can be proved because professional
athletes
obey their plan of training so that they will be more disciplined,
moreover
,training is obviously the path
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excellent health.
As a result
,if the young people take them as
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they will be well-disciplined and healful.
On the other hand
,there are
part
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of society that trust that
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sportsmen are bad examples of imitation and
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that youngs
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youngs
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should not follow their
life style
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.They claim that it is not
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kind of job,
furthermore
,pro
athletes
devote all of their life
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only
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sport
and the training.Actually, if we look at
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daily routine of them we can see that
majority
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of sportsmen make
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sport
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their main job and the reason is they are not intelligent enough to do office work,
moreover
, all of the
athletes
have to train
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and all day to be able to compete with others.Their job is not only about
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good health or discipline there is
also
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hard work and
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of fine education so
that is
why they cannot give youngsters great influence. Despite
drawbacks
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of professional
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i
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strongly
belief
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that
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athletes
are desirable role models for
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young
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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