Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It’s believed by some that students should choose
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in which they ARE
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interested in,
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others advocate for studying only superior skills.Despite the fact that
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embodying everyone with
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to choose their curriculum,
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of adept
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in different spheres should not be overshadowed. On the one hand,universities should enable
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with professionals,who are indispensable in building the future of the nation.In
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terms,studying specific fields of science should be obligatory for those,who study at university.
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conducted by
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journalist revealS
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insufficient workforce in
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government structure,which not only
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the speed of work of
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country,but
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before external invasions.
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job is the one of basic rights guaranteed by international
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law.
Subsequently
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and curriculum should hinge upon one’s responsibility.
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innate possibility,
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one’s output,and
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route learning.
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was conducted
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of people were distinguished by
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and
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which
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elaborateD
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for them.At
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learning
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results.
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we come to the point that,
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curriculum,people should have
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,to choose some of the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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