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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London
The line graph demonstrates the number of commuters who use
London
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the London
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 Underground Station at different
time
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times
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 during
a
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the
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 day. As can be seen from the above chart, the figure for passengers
fluctuate
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fluctuates
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 within the range of 100 to 400 people.
Besides
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, the rate of London Underground travellers
reach
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reaches
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 its peak twice times a day at 7.30 am and 5.30 pm over the surveyed period. To be specific, there are 100 people using London Station at 6 am.
Next,
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this
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 figure rises remarkably to a whopping 400 at 7.30 am before dropping to just under 200 passengers at 9.30 am. After that,
this
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 indicator is found to be in the range of 100 to 300
commiters
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commuters
 until 4 o'clock in the afternoon.
Then
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, it peaks again at 400
passenger
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passengers
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at
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in
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 the next two hours and ends up at approximately 150 people by 10 pm.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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