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The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
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The line chart illustrates the
revise
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 payment of Putokumpu companies in euros from January 2006 to December 2010. In 2006
price
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 of Outokumpu was raised until 2008.
However
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, in
this
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 period, the
cost
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 of
this
Linking Words
company
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has fluctuations
Verb problem
fluctuated
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, and after 2008 the
price
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 of Outokumpu
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started
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start
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start to
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 downsize, which led to the low
price
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 of the
company
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. In 2006 the
price
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 of outokumpu was
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cost
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apply
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euro
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euros
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 and after 2 years the payment of
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company
Correct article usage
the company
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cost
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 31
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euro
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euros
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, which
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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increasing
Correct article usage
an increasing
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company
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. In August 2008, the
price
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 was felt and started
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cost
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costing
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 more
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then
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than
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 6
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euro
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euros
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.
However
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, in 2009 the
Correct your spelling
price
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prise
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price
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 of
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company
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the company
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 rose
until
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to
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euro
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euros
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 and
felt
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fell
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, cost, company, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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