The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian
females
and
males
in different
age
groups who did
the
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regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, it is apparent that
females
did more regular exercises than
males
in almost every
age
in 2010, except for the
age
between 15 to 20, the male outnumbering the female. To be specific, starting from
age
15 to 24, the figure for
males
reached 52.8%,
while
females
were about 5% lower than
males
. As the
age
grew older, the percentage of the female group gradually increase to roughly half of the
females
who went exercise regularly at the
age
of 45 to 54.
However
, the male figure experienced a significant drop and reached a notable low at 39.5% in the
age
35 to 44, and
then
slightly rose to 43.1%, which was approximately 10% lower than the female. After 54 years old, the female got less active in regular physical activity, and the number decreased to 47.1% at the
age
of 65 and over. In terms of the male, the figure grew slightly by 46.7%
at the end
of the period.
However
, it was still 1% lower than the female.
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  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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