The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian
females
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and
males
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in different
age
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groups who did
the
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regular physical activity in 2010.
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, it is apparent that
females
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did more regular exercises than
males
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in almost every
age
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in 2010, except for the
age
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between 15 to 20, the male outnumbering the female. To be specific, starting from
age
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15 to 24, the figure for
males
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reached 52.8%,
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females
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were about 5% lower than
males
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. As the
age
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grew older, the percentage of the female group gradually increase to roughly half of the
females
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who went exercise regularly at the
age
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of 45 to 54.
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, the male figure experienced a significant drop and reached a notable low at 39.5% in the
age
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35 to 44, and
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slightly rose to 43.1%, which was approximately 10% lower than the female. After 54 years old, the female got less active in regular physical activity, and the number decreased to 47.1% at the
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of 65 and over. In terms of the male, the figure grew slightly by 46.7%
at the end
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of the period.
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, it was still 1% lower than the female.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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