The chart below shows the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The given pie chart illustrates information about the ratio of

sodium

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, saturated fat and sugar in four average daily meals

such

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as breakfast, banquet,

lunch

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and

grub

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consumed by Americans.

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, from the figure,

it is clear that

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dinners and lunches that the USA residents consume are

sodium

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and saturated fats rich

while

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their

grub

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has a high portion of added carbohydrates.

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with, the first chart shows the percentage of

sodium

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intake by Americans, dinner contains the highest ratio of

sodium

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at 43%,

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29% of added to

lunch

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. Breakfast and Snacks allow for an equal proportion of

sodium

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, which is 12 % each. The second chart shows saturated fat goes with the same trend as

sodium

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. 21% saturated fat added to

grub

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and 16% in breakfast.

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, at

lunch

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, saturated fat is consumed 26% of total nutrients ,

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however

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in banquet time, saturated fat is consumed about 37% which is the highest for saturated fat consumption.

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, the

grub

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they enjoy contain high carbohydrate and fats, 42% and 21%, respectively, and the carbohydrate intake in

grub

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is higher than that of supper and

lunch

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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186 words

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The chart below shows the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Topic : The huge increase in the number of people with illnesses caused by air pollution from motor vehicles has led to calls for all motorised vehicles to be banned from town and city centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this suggestion ?

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Environmental issues such as climate change have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.