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Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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In the past decade, technology and the internet changed our life so much.
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lefe
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life
 become much easier the world's
population
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 jumped rapidly.Society's people are divided into groups and are
concered
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concerned
 that as the number of citizens
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increase
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 that will lead to global crisis
while
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 many
claiming
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 that notion other are rejecting it. Supporting
first
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 school of thought, People believe due
giantic
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gigantic
growth
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 of
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population
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the population
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 will lead to
shortage
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in
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of
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resouces
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resources
.
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, in
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 decade, nearly all
indiduvals
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individuals
 can find jobs
easiely
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easily
 but
with
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the
increase
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 in
population
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 results in
growth
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compeletion
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completion
competition
 between
candiates
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candidates
.Another supporting
arguement
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argument
, nowadays countries are facing pollution and climate change as one
of
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monster
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 threats
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 the large demand for production and more and more consummation of foods.
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, some
group
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groups
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 of people believe that
this
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increase
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 will lead to
growth
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 in the economy and
postive competitetion
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positive competition
 among different sectors.
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, nowadays the number of
food
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 chain
are
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 increasing
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 larger demand ,so creating
bigger
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a bigger
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 number of
opportnities
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opportunities
 for fresher
graudates
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graduates
.
Secondly
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, in crisis,
bright-minds
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 and enterprises rose with their
innovation
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 ideas for ways to solve problems,
also
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 with
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increase
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an increase
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 in
population
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 will lead to
varies
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of
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point
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 of
views
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. In conclusion,
i
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 believe that
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growth
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the growth
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 of
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population
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the population
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 will aid the community and economy in many
friutful
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fruitful
 ways and
this
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 rapid
increase
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advantages
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 outraced their
disdvantages
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disadvantages
.
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, we will have
society
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a society
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 with
powerful
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a powerful
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 economy and
smart
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a smart
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sunistaniable
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sustainable
 environment.
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