Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that foreign tourists should be charged more than local people when
traveling
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cultural
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and historical attractions. I completely disagree with
this
scheme/ proposal/ idea and I do believe that we should treat all visitors should be treated equally. Engaging in the place where they first started their working career, means that they are familiar with the company's
situtaions
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situations
situation
. They have got information
of
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the boss, the company rules and the salary system. With
such
notices, they are able to classify their career plans.
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,
the
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understanding of
salary
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system can help them find
the
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dream
position in
this
organisation, and the rules lead them to success. A clear plan of working life shows the procedure of every
steps
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, and
make
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the
dream
easier to come true. Even if devoting
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in
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one company for the whole
times
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had a lot of advantages, changing
the
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jobs is the one I agree with. Leaving the old place gives us opportunities to compare them and to choose the one more suitable for us. If we stay in the same industry without transformation, there is no chance for us to get a
job
.
Furthermore
, the experiment of comparing several organisations is a useful way to find a
dream
job
.
For example
, my
cousion
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cousin
Jane find her
dream
job
as a teacher after several times of changing her
job
. In conclusion,
while
I can understand the reason why individuals are concerned about tours to remote places, I would argue that there are more benefits than drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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