The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
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The graph demonstrates the rank of worklessness in the US and
Japan
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from
March
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1993 to
March
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1999.
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, in 1993 the US index of unemployment was three times higher than
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's. But now, the score is almost the same. In 1999, the result shows apply 7% in the
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and 2.5% in
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. In the next two years, number of the jobless in
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got increased,
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in the
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it was decreasing. In
March
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1996, the rate of
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prevailed to 4.5%,
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the
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got about 5%. Between 1996 and 1997
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endured reducing, but again they gained more unemployed people than one year ago,
USA
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still was losing from workless inhabitants.
March
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1998, indicators of the two countries illustrate almost the same numbers.
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1999 year, the Japanese overtook Americans by a percentage of joblessness. Index describes that
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had 0.0001% more than the
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had in 1999. The final percentage was about 5.5%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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